The news about Australia’s historic approval of MDMA and psilocybin (found in magic mushrooms) was covered by many publications, including the digital news service New Matilda.
The headlines of the article is placed under the photo, which looks a little strange and unusual, but at the same time doesn’t add, in my opinion, any winning appeal. The headline itself basically reflects the topic, but there is definitely room for improvement.
For example, the headline could indicate that Australia was the first in the world to approve these drugs, as was pointed out by many other media. New Matilda didn’t mention this not only in the title, but nowhere in the article.
Many paragraphs are too overloaded with bracketed explanations which could have been avoided by using a comma. Moreover, the journalist, for example, indicates in brackets an abbreviation for post-traumatic stress disorder, but later in the text not only writes the whole name again, but also changes its spelling.
The text can be visually divided into two parts: first one is without a single quote, while the second part consists entirely of quotes, they go one by one and some are too long and complicate the perception of the text.
The hyperlink to the original TGA report is inserted the old-fashioned way, with the word “here”, although a more convenient way is to simply mention the report and hyperlink those words to the original.
In general, the text is very messy and hard to read. It could have been improved by evenly distributing quotes and adding 1-2 photos or videos, as well as some links to related articles.
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